Kalgan and his enforcers don't seem to be particularly happy with their captain's orders. And yet they obey... (For now at least. We were promised a mutiny, right?)
Edit... Actually, I didn't expect the mutiny to goff go off before it comes to deciding what to do with the Sun, but IF IT DOESN'T GO OFF REAL SOON, then I'M GONNASCREAAAAM!!! *inhales* *holds breath*
Edit again: Their fire? Isn't the Southern Sun a terraforming ship full of colonists? And they have weapons they can aim at another ship? Or, worse, at their own cargo deck? What for? Who constructs a ship that has weaponry to fire at it's own innards in the first place? And a terraforming ship, of all ships one could possily construct? That - that would be... does anybody know a better word than "OUTRAGEOUS"?
Sorry for the heap of questions.
Yeah… I debated about the Sun having weapons, and decided the political climate when it left Earth 200 years ago might have warranted it. There may indeed have been competing colonial powers and space piracy that required a ship to not be totally unprotected. He's definitely referring to external guns, though!
Thank you. Until I learned that it was a terraforming ship, I thought of weapons just being normal for a space ship, but terraforming ships can be assumed to be huge and slow, too slow to flee or fight, so... Anyway, after I had written my comment, I got suspicious that the captain referred to hand guns, to be used after all the "guest" are on board. So (special) thanks for removing my self-made confusion. :)
It's very clever what you did with the word bubbles at the top of page 16. I wasn't sure at first whether it was Jansen or Devers giving the order, but that's kind of the point: the words are going into Jansen's ear and right out his mouth.